Sunday, October 13, 2019


the molecules of air are charged with grief...

photo by joelpapalini from pixabay


as if you
have taken flight

quietly left
not even a goodbye
in the night

left me with
just the air
i breathe


sweet, sharp & painful.

Black Sabbath - She's Gone

© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2019

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Blogger Sherry Blue Sky said...

The quote up top is is your poem. I can feel what it is to be left "with just the air I breathe." Yes, that is grief.

14 October, 2019 00:15  
Blogger C. Sandlin said...

This is poignant and brings a sense of loss sharp into the last stanza.

14 October, 2019 01:51  
Blogger Sanaa Rizvi said...

Oh this is heart-wrenching ..

14 October, 2019 02:40  
Blogger Mary said...

Poignant! Strong.
The ending takes my breath away!
I have really enjoyed your writing over the years.

14 October, 2019 05:26  
Blogger Truedessa said...

Ugg - It hurts when one goes away without a good-bye, it makes me want to cry.

14 October, 2019 10:22  
Blogger Old Egg said...

Relax, you are still alive and certainly not the first to experience a break up.

14 October, 2019 13:37  
Blogger Jae Rose said...

You capture so much in so few words

14 October, 2019 18:31  
Blogger Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

I know just what you mean!

14 October, 2019 19:24  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


thank you!
glad you liked that preamble quote. :)


thank you!
sometimes, less is better. :)


thank you.

14 October, 2019 20:55  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


thank you for the kind comment. :)


yes, it was at a hospital and she went off gently...


yeah, but i certainly cannot forget the experience... :(

14 October, 2019 21:21  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


thank you! :)


i bet you do. :)

14 October, 2019 21:54  
Blogger Margaret said...

sigh. yes. we have all been there. AND SURVIVED - usually something better knocks at our door :)

17 October, 2019 07:21  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Thank you, Margaret!
i guess most of us have been there. :)

17 October, 2019 19:01  
Blogger A Cuban In London said...

Beautiful. Thanks.

18 October, 2019 06:25  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

Thank you, Cuban! :)

18 October, 2019 21:02  
Blogger Marja said...

Beautiful poem and such a powerful last line "left me with just the air i breathe"

19 October, 2019 04:14  
Blogger magiceye said...

This is brilliant!

19 October, 2019 22:17  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


Thank you! :)


glad to see you! :)

20 October, 2019 21:33  

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