Flight
the molecules of air are charged with grief...
photo by joelpapalini from pixabay
Flight
gone
as if you
have taken flight
quietly left
not even a goodbye
in the night
left me with
just the air
i breathe
15/11/2008
**********
sweet, sharp & painful.
Black Sabbath - She's Gone
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2019
Flight
gone
as if you
have taken flight
quietly left
not even a goodbye
in the night
left me with
just the air
i breathe
15/11/2008
**********
sweet, sharp & painful.
Black Sabbath - She's Gone
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2019
posted by dsnake1 at 11:02 PM
18 Comments:
The quote up top is wonderful....as is your poem. I can feel what it is to be left "with just the air I breathe." Yes, that is grief.
This is poignant and brings a sense of loss sharp into the last stanza.
Oh this is heart-wrenching ..
Poignant! Strong.
The ending takes my breath away!
I have really enjoyed your writing over the years.
Ugg - It hurts when one goes away without a good-bye, it makes me want to cry.
Relax, you are still alive and certainly not the first to experience a break up.
You capture so much in so few words
I know just what you mean!
Sherry,
thank you!
glad you liked that preamble quote. :)
Chrissa,
thank you!
sometimes, less is better. :)
Sanaa,
thank you.
Mary,
thank you for the kind comment. :)
Truedessa,
yes, it was at a hospital and she went off gently...
Robin,
yeah, but i certainly cannot forget the experience... :(
Jae,
thank you! :)
Rosemary,
i bet you do. :)
sigh. yes. we have all been there. AND SURVIVED - usually something better knocks at our door :)
Thank you, Margaret!
i guess most of us have been there. :)
Beautiful. Thanks.
Thank you, Cuban! :)
Beautiful poem and such a powerful last line "left me with just the air i breathe"
This is brilliant!
Marja,
Thank you! :)
magiceye,
glad to see you! :)
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