Sunday, November 06, 2016


Some days are worse than Mondays. Especially if you think the world is out to get you...

photo by pedrojperez at


some days the sun is a magnesium flare
the people in the streets wipe sweat
off their noses, seeking shadows
to hide in, this town, and you
expect the walls and roads
to crumble and collapse.
you duck into a cafe
hoping there's cash
left in the pockets
for a set lunch.
you are surprised
the air-con is cold
the tiles clean, spotless
the clientele polite, making
just small noises, forks poking
at plates, you take the day's papers
the headlines, the black ink staring back

Paris Peace Talks Stalled
North Vietnamese negotiators walk out.

who cares about U.S. air raids when you just
want to look for the jobs vacant pages?
and then the girl brings you your food
she is plump, her hair tied in a bun
her thighs in a short short skirt
ravishingly creamy, fiery sexy
and you really thought of
making hot love to her
and outside the sun
just screams and
shines blindly
an exploding

ball of


"and all i could do was
sweat out the summer,
dripping with rage
while the days ran hot
and the rain trees bled
dead brown leaves,"

-- dsnake1, peace

Shared on Poetry Pantry #327 at Poets United.

© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2016

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Blogger Mary said...

I like the progression of your poetry today....the sun, the cafe, the thoughts, then back to the sun again! Weaves quite a complex tale.

06 November, 2016 23:28  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

thank you, Mary!
i was thinking about the time when i was in limbo, just out of school & looking for a job. :)

06 November, 2016 23:43  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Good-ness. This is astounding poetry.

07 November, 2016 00:39  
Blogger brudberg said...

I really like this, especially the juxtaposition between the world's big question and the struggle of a normal man...

07 November, 2016 01:05  
Blogger Sanaa Rizvi said...

an exploding ball of hegemony... that is such a powerful image!! Excellent write :)

07 November, 2016 01:35  
Blogger Truedessa said...

I felt the sense of hard times, little money and trying to find a job as the rest of the world spins around. The sun's warmth and the girl are distractions from the heat of life.

07 November, 2016 02:13  
Blogger Julian said...

I have to say I agree with Mary's comment. Just to add I had a really good read here.

07 November, 2016 03:30  
Blogger Sherry Blue Sky said...

I love the look of this poem on the page and especially like the closing stanza.

07 November, 2016 04:25  
Blogger Brother Ollie said...

tight poem! Well crafted indeed.

07 November, 2016 09:33  
Blogger Wendy Bourke said...

A brilliant and fascinating form poem. Awesome writing!

07 November, 2016 10:00  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


thank you! :)
welcome to the community!


i loved how you put it, 'the world's big question & the struggle of a normal man.' i guessed you noticed the 'timestamp'? :)


thank you! :)


yes, hard times and little money! sometimes we need those distractions, :)


thank you! glad that you enjoyed the read. :)


it does look like an open mouth shouting, isn't it?
hegemony. that's what some people/organisation/country are trying to do...

Brother Ollie,

thank you! thanks for the visit! :)


thank you! :)

07 November, 2016 10:51  
Blogger Sumana Roy said...

Love the spinning of thoughts and stringing them together....

07 November, 2016 11:49  
Blogger Old Egg said...

How beautifully visual your poem is; I was sweating, grinning and leering all at the same time.

07 November, 2016 13:23  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


thank you! :)


thank you!
haha! leering? :)

07 November, 2016 15:12  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

forks poking at plates, the magnesium flare, the contrast of the cafe and the harsh headlines... beautifully woven.

07 November, 2016 21:28  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

thank you, thotpurge! :)

07 November, 2016 21:51  
Blogger Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Oh, you made me feel it all! A terrific piece of writing.

09 November, 2016 10:12  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

thank you, Rosemary! :)

09 November, 2016 20:12  

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