Sunday, February 23, 2014

stars

Pain. Sometimes after so many years, you still feel it.



image by dsnake1, done with pencilmadness




st☆rs


i didn't see many stars up there these days.
is my eyesight failing
or has my heart been bleeding?
but i know you are up there
amongst the Lyre, the Swan, the Bear.


04.10.2006
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"That's the thing about pain. It demands to be felt.”
― John Green, The Fault in our Stars.



Shared on Poetry Pantry #190 at Poets United.


This is an unpublished poem. I wrote it some time back, no edits, but was hesitant to post it.





© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2014

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16 Comments:

Blogger R.K. Garon said...

“Trust your heart if the seas catch fire, live by love though the stars walk backward.”
― E.E. Cummings
Found this, thought I throw it out. :-)
Have a great week.
ZQ

24 February, 2014 00:15  
Blogger Jack said...

I enjoy how this tackles the crux of vision (in certain situations, obviously): Is it external sensors taking something in, or is it the heart of the viewer giving an ultimate filter?

24 February, 2014 00:32  
Blogger madhumakhi said...

How lovely! Stars will always be there even if our senses fail us. Our loved ones will always be present even if we don't see them.

24 February, 2014 01:00  
Blogger Brian Miller said...

there is some pain that will never go away...though looking to the heavens we can believe they are there...and still close...

24 February, 2014 01:25  
Blogger Mary said...

Some nights it seems there ARE few stars in the sky. Here anyway it is not a person's eyes failing but the overcast sky! We just have to have FAITH they are indeed there.

24 February, 2014 04:15  
Blogger anthonynorth said...

Beautifully poignant words.

24 February, 2014 04:20  
Blogger Sherry Blue Sky said...

I so relate - "sometimes after so many years you still feel it." Yes. This is one of my favourites of your poems, Lee San. Truly beautiful, and human, and real. Love the knowing the stars are up there even unseen......"among the Lyre, the Swan, the Bear."

24 February, 2014 04:35  
Blogger Nataša Dolenc said...

short and sweet.

24 February, 2014 04:36  
Blogger kelvin s.m. said...

The tale is intriguing but the emotion it holds is perfect. This is brevity-wise one of my faves of yours. Smiles.

24 February, 2014 11:31  
Blogger Aditi said...

I can sense such heaviness in heart here...really strong emotions conveyed in such few verses! Great work!

24 February, 2014 14:12  
OpenID coordinatedmayhem said...

Short, yet touching. The best kind. Beautiful read that gives me a desire to go outside and look up.

24 February, 2014 14:15  
Blogger Sumana Roy said...

This is so intense....

24 February, 2014 21:44  
Blogger M.Z said...

Beautiful words, is it about a loss of someone, or am i way off here?

24 February, 2014 21:45  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

ZQ,

thanks for the quote! loved it!
have a great week too. :)


Jack,

more of the heart. i am heartbroken. :)


madhumakhi,

you're right, our loved ones will always be present, even if we don't see them.


Brian,

we tell ourselves to move on, we move on, but then some days, we just couldn't help it and think about those who are not with us anymore.


Mary,

most nights, it's overcast skies. but sometimes, when i do the night shifts, on my way back, the stars are clear. :)


Anthony,

thank you! :)


Sherry,

thank you! i guess you can see the stars very clearly most nights in your part of Canada. :)


Natasa,

thank you! :)


kelvin,

always a pleasure to have you around. i am leaning heavily towards shorter verses. :)


Aditi,

thank you! i like it when the reader senses the emotions i am trying to convey. :)


coordinatedmayhem,

:)

thank you!


Sumana,

thank you!


M.Z,

thanks for the visit! no, you're spot on. it's about the loss of someone close to me.



24 February, 2014 23:08  
Blogger Gabriella said...

A most poignant poem! The loss and the pain can be strongly felt. Great painting too!

07 March, 2014 05:12  
Blogger dsnake1 said...

thank you, Gabriella. glad you liked the painting. all done with pixels. :)

07 March, 2014 19:05  

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