stars
Pain. Sometimes after so many years, you still feel it.
image by dsnake1, done with pencilmadness
st☆rs
i didn't see many stars up there these days.
is my eyesight failing
or has my heart been bleeding?
but i know you are up there
amongst the Lyre, the Swan, the Bear.
04.10.2006
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"That's the thing about pain. It demands to be felt.”
― John Green, The Fault in our Stars.
Shared on Poetry Pantry #190 at Poets United.
This is an unpublished poem. I wrote it some time back, no edits, but was hesitant to post it.
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2014
st☆rs
i didn't see many stars up there these days.
is my eyesight failing
or has my heart been bleeding?
but i know you are up there
amongst the Lyre, the Swan, the Bear.
04.10.2006
**********
"That's the thing about pain. It demands to be felt.”
― John Green, The Fault in our Stars.
Shared on Poetry Pantry #190 at Poets United.
This is an unpublished poem. I wrote it some time back, no edits, but was hesitant to post it.
© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2014
posted by dsnake1 at 11:39 PM
16 Comments:
“Trust your heart if the seas catch fire, live by love though the stars walk backward.”
― E.E. Cummings
Found this, thought I throw it out. :-)
Have a great week.
ZQ
I enjoy how this tackles the crux of vision (in certain situations, obviously): Is it external sensors taking something in, or is it the heart of the viewer giving an ultimate filter?
How lovely! Stars will always be there even if our senses fail us. Our loved ones will always be present even if we don't see them.
there is some pain that will never go away...though looking to the heavens we can believe they are there...and still close...
Some nights it seems there ARE few stars in the sky. Here anyway it is not a person's eyes failing but the overcast sky! We just have to have FAITH they are indeed there.
Beautifully poignant words.
I so relate - "sometimes after so many years you still feel it." Yes. This is one of my favourites of your poems, Lee San. Truly beautiful, and human, and real. Love the knowing the stars are up there even unseen......"among the Lyre, the Swan, the Bear."
short and sweet.
The tale is intriguing but the emotion it holds is perfect. This is brevity-wise one of my faves of yours. Smiles.
I can sense such heaviness in heart here...really strong emotions conveyed in such few verses! Great work!
Short, yet touching. The best kind. Beautiful read that gives me a desire to go outside and look up.
This is so intense....
Beautiful words, is it about a loss of someone, or am i way off here?
ZQ,
thanks for the quote! loved it!
have a great week too. :)
Jack,
more of the heart. i am heartbroken. :)
madhumakhi,
you're right, our loved ones will always be present, even if we don't see them.
Brian,
we tell ourselves to move on, we move on, but then some days, we just couldn't help it and think about those who are not with us anymore.
Mary,
most nights, it's overcast skies. but sometimes, when i do the night shifts, on my way back, the stars are clear. :)
Anthony,
thank you! :)
Sherry,
thank you! i guess you can see the stars very clearly most nights in your part of Canada. :)
Natasa,
thank you! :)
kelvin,
always a pleasure to have you around. i am leaning heavily towards shorter verses. :)
Aditi,
thank you! i like it when the reader senses the emotions i am trying to convey. :)
coordinatedmayhem,
:)
thank you!
Sumana,
thank you!
M.Z,
thanks for the visit! no, you're spot on. it's about the loss of someone close to me.
A most poignant poem! The loss and the pain can be strongly felt. Great painting too!
thank you, Gabriella. glad you liked the painting. all done with pixels. :)
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