Wednesday, July 11, 2012

how deep is

I wrote this poem for the recently concluded NaPoWriMo. It is a poem about loss and how the narrator is coping (or not coping) with it.

I am posting this for the Poetry Pantry -#105 at Poets United.

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how deep is

how deep is
your love?
down in the
subway tunnels
on late nights
some nights
aimless rides
the tunnel walls
just inches
from my face
flashing by
our lives
on a reel
of memory
till it all ends
on a bleak night
and i am
all alone
in the
rumbling wombs
of the trains
that song
playing again
on the tracks
how deep is
your love?
till i resurface
to the neon
drenched streets
to the city lights

revised 10/07/2012

© cheong lee san ( dsnake1 ) 2012

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Blogger Jenny Woolf said...

Great poem and I can imagine it as a wonderful song too.

12 July, 2012 01:53  
Anonymous HaikuWater said...

Visiting from Poetry Pantry where I was posting a short poem, and am glad I followed your link. I think the subway is a mystical metaphor chosen beautifully for your poem. I can hear the deep echoing rumbles and see the fragmentary flashes of lights on the tunnel walls so clearly in your carefully chosen words.

12 July, 2012 06:13  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


thanks for the visit! a song too? i would prefer it in rock. :D


thanks for visiting! your words will encourage me to post more at the poetry pantry. :)
you are right that the subway can be a metaphor for many things: claustrophobia, loneliness, urban life. i am glad that you enjoyed the poem. :)

12 July, 2012 22:51  
Blogger K McGee said...

Strong metaphor you've created on this subway. The sights and sounds (along with the smells in some cases) give one an almost surreal feeling of loneliness, even when surrounded by people - much like grieving.

14 July, 2012 04:18  
Blogger hyperCRYPTICal said...

Superb write.

(I did visit here yesterday but your blog would not allow me to comment...)

Anna :o]

14 July, 2012 07:48  
Blogger dsnake1 said...


thanks for the visit!
you've it nailed down so perfectly, the feelings one can encounter in the subway. :)


thank you!

blogger is acting up again. :)
it happened to me too, when i visited some blogs. then i suspected that it might be the browser. i was using firefox (an older version) then, and when i switched over to another browser, Chrome, i was able to comment.

14 July, 2012 23:09  
Blogger ashok said...

superb writing!

15 July, 2012 01:26  
Anonymous dsnake1 said...

thank you, Ashok! :)

15 July, 2012 10:17  
Blogger magiceye said...

loved the vivid imagery

15 July, 2012 12:22  
Anonymous dsnake1 said...

it's great to hear from you. thank you! :)

15 July, 2012 23:27  

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